ETHOS- Do you present how you are connected to the issues/ background you have in relation to it? I didn’t include my relations to animal abuse in my essay but in my presentation I did include my relations to cockfighting and dog fighting.

Are all of your sources credible? I’d like think so. I tried my best to make sure they were credible by not using an opinionated sources or blogs.

Do you appeal to a wide audience? Do you include address and concede to at least one opposing view? I didn’t include an opposing view on animal cruelty about how there are some people who don’t believe animals indeed have rights and emotions just like we do, also I included that some also think they are to use and treat animals as they please. ( Forced entertainment, neglect, ect.)

Are you empathetic, understanding and respectful in your language to the community that the issues most negatively effects? In my first and second draft I let my emotions get the best of me and included an overly sentimental appeal about how those who don’t do anything about abuse they witness are just as bad as the abusers. I fixed that for my final so it docent sound so mean and snobby. I tried to use persuasive language to encourage my hostile audience to not remain quiet.

Is you solution ethical? I sure hope so. I tried to make my solution as simple yet effective as I possibly could.

LOGOS- Are all of your claims backed with enough evidence to persuade a critical audience? I really tried to back up my claims with enough evidence, either included statistics and proven facts from various credible sources.

Is your solution practical and specific? Do you provide evidence that your solution could work? I would like to think my solutions are practical and I tried to be specific about the solutions for the different forms of animal cruelty. I didn’t include evidence that my solution would work.

Do you avoid fallacies and contradictions? As I stated in a previous question, I did have an overly sentimental appeal fallacy in my first and second draft but I fixed that in my final. I myself didn’t catch any other fallacies in my essay. Although I may be wrong.

PATHOS- Are you caring and passionate about your issue? Have you made an effort for this to be evident in your language? I am indeed passionate about this issues, an anything that involves animals. I did include my love for animals in the essay and presentation. I don’t expect people to be as passionate as I am about it, but I truly hope I encouraged them to possibly help any animal they may see who is in need.

Do you connect with your audience? Do you tell include personal anecdotes? Im not too sure if I connected to the audience, but I did share my personal experience with animal cruelty in hopes that it inspires them to take action whenever they witness any kind of form animal cruelty.

Do you appeal directly to your classmates with a call to action they could participate in? I did appeal to my classmates with a call to action, I hope it motivates them to try their best in the call to action.

   

Gia Figueroa

Janel Spencer

WRT101S

December 10, 2019

Addressing Animal Cruelty

            All around the world different animals, domesticated and wild, experience abuse and neglect. Animal cruelty takes on many different forms such as: industrial animal agriculture farms, animal fighting, puppy mills, and pet neglect. In every part of the world there are 180 million animals who are being neglected, starved, beaten, and not well taken care of. There are people who look the other way when they encounter an animal who is being neglected in any way. Animal abuse of any sort should never be taken lightly or ignored, as the animals too feel fear, pain, desperation and sorrow.

            Animal cruelty has been an ongoing issue for a very long time. Cruelty towards animals has been documented since the 12^th century. Some action has also recently been taken to help enforce consequences. For example, on Monday  25, 2019, President Donald Trump signed a bill called “The Preventing Animal Cruelty and Torture Act,” making any sort of animal cruelty a federal felony. Violating this law includes a hefty fine and up to seven or more years in prison.(Zaveri) This bill I think this is a good step towards ensuring the safety and well being of animals in our country. 

 There are many people who don’t believe animal cruelty is as big as an issue as it really is. Some people may not think that animals too have rights. According to  Humane Animal Farming, animals have “freedom from thirst and hunger—by ready access to fresh water and a diet to maintain full health and vigour; freedom from discomfort—by providing an appropriate environment including shelter and a comfortable resting area;  freedom from pain, injury, and disease—by prevention or rapid diagnosis and treatment; freedom to express normal behavior—by providing sufficient space, proper facilities and company of the animals’ own kind; freedom from fear and distress—by ensuring conditions and treatment which avoid mental suffering”  Domesticated pets have the right to be in a safe, loving home where they receive all their needs and love, and shelter. Wild animals have the right to live freely amongst their environment where they can roam freely without being hunted, abused, and used in anyway that’s harmful to them. 

            Even though animals, too, have rights, industrial farmers often keep animals in absolutely terrible conditions. According to the ASPCA, the livestock animals are placed in cages that are far too small for their bodies, and multiple animals are placed in one cage with little to no room to move around.  Then they get slaughtered for their meat, eggs, and dairy. Perhaps there isn’t any way around the slaughtering of the animals, but reducing your consumption of meat can decrease the amount of the animals from being slaughtered by than 72%. Currently 86% of the animals are livestock animals who suffer immensely in these farms. Exposing the horrible suffering that the animals in those farms have to endure their entire life can bring awareness to their suffering. The knowledge of the cruelty the industrial farms bring to the animals can hopefully persuade people to maybe decrease their consumption of the products these animals produce.

            Animal fighting is another form of animal cruelty. 17% of violent animal cruelty cases are of forced animal fighting.  It’s a bloodsport where cruel people breed and train dogs and cocks to fight for their sick entertainment and for profit. Often times these fights end with one severely injured and sadly dead, whilst the other one is injured and forced to fight once again. These animals are raised and abused and mistreated from the very beginning of their lives.

            Puppy mills, also known as backyard breeders, are people who have dogs in cruel conditions and will breed them to sell the puppies to public people, flea markets and swap-meets. According to ASPCA and other similar sources, often the mothers who are forced to continue breeding are not in the healthiest conditions. They sometimes have heart and kidney diseases from breeding over and over again. The pups who are sold sometimes inherit illnesses and diseases from the mother. The pups who are sold to people who may not have good intentions.

            There are even pet owners who have animals as pets, yet they neglect to shelter their pets from extreme weathers such as excessive heat and in very cold weather. Failing to provide proper care and shelter for animals is the most common form of neglect, 26%  of neglected animals are reported each year . Many people, about 23%, can witness the neglect and abuse of animals, knowing that it is wrong, but they still don’t report the signs of neglect and abuse they witness. Some owners will abandoned and leave the animals out in the street, causing them to get either hurt whilst in the streets, or worse.

            Scientists have researched and studied that animals too are capable of experiencing emotion. When they are beaten, starved, experimented on, and/or abandoned, they feel pain, sorrow and fear just like we humans would if it were to be us in their place.(Bekoff)  We shouldn’t be so insensitive to the millions of animals who suffer at the hands of thoughtless and cruel humans. The abuse animals suffer at our hands is not only heart breaking, it’s sickening. 

            Animal cruelty is such a huge issue that isn’t talked about enough. Whether it be because people aren’t aware of the different forms of abuse, or they may think that they are just one person, so what difference could they make? Imagine how many other people think that exact thing. Calling and reporting any signs of neglect and abuse you see is a small step towards helping those animals in need. Being aware of the different forms of abuse is important. Despite you being just one person, you speaking on behalf of the helpless, voiceless animals may make a big impact on not just the animals, but it can encourage others who aren’t aware to inform themselves and possibly help make a change, too. 

     I encourage everyone to intervene whenever they come across an animal who is being abused or neglected. Report any and all signs of animal cruelty. Decrease the amount of meat and animal products you consume.  Don’t be afraid of taking the first few steps at some things when it comes to hurt animals, they are helpless and without a voice. We can be their voice to help change the way animals are treated, little by little. 

Works Cited

Evans, Kim Masters. “Animal cruelty cases, by animal type, 2006.” Animal Rights, Gale, 2007. Information Plus Reference Series. Gale In Context: Opposing Viewpoints, https://link.gale.com/apps/doc/EJ2210079562/OVIC?u=pima_main&sid=OVIC&xid=0aae41c2. Accessed 21 Nov. 2019.

Reyes,Simone “Animal rights–birth of an activist TEDxOrangeCoast 24,”

           Oct. 2014, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=erg8sDIYjmw

Kordzek, Andrea. “An Exploratory Study of Animal Cruelty Prosecution in New York.” Society & Animals 22.6 (2014): 602-622. https://www.deepdyve.com/lp/brill/an-exploratory-study-of-animal-cruelty-prosecution-in-new-york-Vu2oj3nQXc

Evans, Kim Masters. “Breakdown of common violent offenses committed against animals, 2003. Animal Rights, Gale, 2007. Information Plus Reference Series. Gale In Context: Opposing Viewpoints, https://0-link-gale-com.library2.pima.edu/apps/doc/EJ2210079565/OVIC?u=pima_main&sid=OVIC&xid=4b669ced. Accessed 11 Nov. 2019.

Zaveri, Mihir, “ Presidnet Trump signs federal Animal Cruelty bill into laws”, 2019 The New York Times, 2019 https://www.nytimes.com/2019/11/25/us/politics/trump-animal-cruelty-bill.html

M. Bekoff, The emotional lives of animals: A leading scientist explores animal joy, sorrow, and empathy — and why they matter, Novato, California: New World Library, 2010.

Munsey, Matthew. “Humane Animal Farming.” Food: In Context, edited by Brenda Wilmoth Lerner and K. Lee Lerner, vol. 1, Gale, 2011, pp. 468-471. In Context Series. Gale In Context: Opposing Viewpoints, https://0-link-gale-com.library2.pima.edu/apps/doc/CX1918600144/OVIC?u=pima_main&sid=OVIC&xid=75ac5823. Accessed 4 Dec. 2019.

Bershadker, Matthew “ Farm Animal Welfare”  ASPCA Accessed Nov.2019

https://www.aspca.org/animal-cruelty/farm-animal-welfare

https://www.aspca.org/animal-cruelty/farm-animal-welfare/animals-factory-farms

In every part of the world there are animals who are being neglected, starved, beaten, and not well taken care of. There are people who look the other way when they encounter an animal who is being neglected in any way. Animal abuse of any sort should never be taken lightly or ignored, as the animals too feel fear, pain, desperation and sorrow.

Evidence- Numerical evidence- there’s a statistics list of which animals get abused and how they get abused., On the ASPCA, and the Prevention website, I gathered my information’s on the rights animals have

Animal cruelty has been an ongoing issue for a very long time. Cruelty towards animals has been documented since the 12^th century. Some action has also recently been taken to help enforce consequences. For example, on 25, the President signed a bill called “The Preventing Animal Cruelty and Torture Act,” making any sort of animal cruelty a federal felony.

Evidence- Movement evidence- For as long as this issue has been around, recently “The Preventing of Animal Cruelty and Torture Act” is a bill that was recently signed by the president to enforce the severity of the consequences , Animal abuse and neglect is now a federal felony.

Animal fighting is another form of animal cruelty. It’s a blood sport where cruel people breed and train dogs and cocks to fight for their sick entertainment and for profit. Often times these fights end with one severely injured and sadly dead, whilst the other one is injured and forced to fight once again.
Evidence- Numerical evidence- 17% of violent cases of animal cruelty are of animal fighting (cockfighting, dog fighting, ect.)

Animal cruelty

            All around the world different animals, domesticated and wild animals experiences abuse and neglect. Animal cruelty takes on many different forms such as: animal hoarding, animal testing, industrial animal agriculture farms,  active abuse of any kind like, intentionally physically harming them and forcing cockfighting, and dog fighting. In every part of the world there are animals who are being neglected, starved, beaten, and not well taken care. There are people who look the other way when they encounter an animal who is being neglected in any way.  Animal abuse of any sort should never be taken lightly or ignored, as the animals too feel fear, pain, desperation and sorrow.

              Animal cruelty is such a huge issue, that isn’t talked about enough. Whether it be because people aren’t aware of the different forms of abuse or because they may think that they are just one person, so what difference could they make? Imagine how many other people think that exact thing. Calling and reporting any signs of neglect and abuse you see, is a small step towards helping those animals in need. Being aware of the different forms of abuse  Despite you being, just one person, you speaking on behalf of the helpless, voiceless animals may make a big impact on not just the animals, but it can encourage others who aren’t aware , to inform themselves and possibly help make a change.

            Animal cruelty has been an ongoing issue for a very long time. Cruelty towards animals goes back to the 12^th century.  Some action has been taken to express the severity of this issue. For example, on Monday the 25^TH, the President signed a bill called “ the Preventing Animal Cruelty and Torture act”, making any sort of animal cruelty a federal felony. Violating this law includes a hefty fine and up to seven or more years in prison.  This bill I think this is a good step towards showing those who aren’t aware of just how severe the consequences to animal abuse are.

            There are many people who don’t believe animal cruelty is as big as an issue as it really is. Some people may not think that animals too have rights. Domesticated pets have the right to be in a safe, loving home where they receive all their needs and love, and shelter. Wild animals have the right to live freely amongst their environment where they can roam freely without being hunted, abused and used in anyway that’s harmful to them. Often there are people who feel entitled to use and treat animals in any way they see fit, usually for profit gain and simply for entertainment.

             Industrial farmers keep the animals in absolutely terrible conditions. They are placed into cages that are far too small for some of their bodies, or multiple animals are kept together with little to no room to move around.  Then they get slaughter for the either their meats, eggs and dairy. Perhaps there isn’t any way to around the slaughtering of the animals, reducing your consumption of meat can decrease the amount of the animals from being slaughtered. Exposing the horrible suffering that the animals in those farms have to endure their entire life can bring

awareness to their suffering. With the knowledge of the cruelty the industrial farms bring to the animals , can hopefully persuade people to maybe decrease their consumptions of the products these animals produce.

            Animal fighting is another form of animal cruelty. It’s a blood sport where cruel people bred and trained dogs, and cocks to fight for their sick entertainment, and for profit. Often times these fights end with one severely injured and sadly dead, whilst the other one is injured and forced to fight once again. These animals are raised and abused and mistreated from the very beginning of their lives.

            Puppy mills, also known as backyard breeders are people who have dogs in cruel conditions  and will breed them to sell the puppies to public people, flea markets and swap meats. Often the mothers who are forced to continue breeding are not in the healthiest conditions. They sometimes have heart and kidney diseases from breeding over and over again. The pups who are sold, sometimes inherit illnesses and diseases from the mother. The pups who are sold, are sold to people who may not have good intentions.

            Animals are innocent creatures, that get abused, tested on and so much more. Animals are abuse and neglected every day, millions die and suffer in such inhumane ways. There are even pet owners who have animals as pet, yet they neglect to shelter their pets from extreme weathers such as excessive heat and in very cold weather. Many people can witness the neglect and abuse of animals, knowing that it is wrong, but they still don’t report the signs of  neglect and abuse they witness. Some owners will abandoned and leave the animals out in the street, causing them to get either hurt whilst in the streets, or worst.

             Scientist have researched and studied that animals too are capable of experience emotion. When they are beater, starved, experimented on, abandoned, they feel pain, sorrow and fear just like we humans would if it were to be us in their place. We shouldn’t be so insensitive to the  millions of animals who suffer at the hands of thoughtless and cruel humans. The abuse animals suffer at our hands is not only heart breaking, it’s sicken. People who witness abuse and neglect towards any animals and chose to not report it are just as bas as the people who are inflicting the pain to the poor precious animal .

            I don’t think the issue of animal cruelty will ever truly be 100% solved, but there are some ways to help prevent it, and to help prevent it from escalating any further. Despite the fact that there are people who ignore animal abuse, there are still people who care about animals and their safety, and will do what they can to make sure those animals who are in pain are reported to the authorities to bring them to a safe and secure place where they no longer have to endure neglect and abuse.

Essay 1

Word choice error: sometimes when looking for the correct word to express exactly what you want to say can be difficult. word choice error happens when your not paying attention to the word or trying too hard to come up with a better word when a simple one is appropriate.

Gambino asserts in his video that in America, the black community has to deal with many injustices.

Gambino asserts in his video that in America, the black community has to deal with many long-standing injustices .

Comma splice: A variety of run on sentences that occur when two complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb are joined mistakenly with a comma

Gambino doesn’t state what is right nor what is wrong, he argues that police brutality and racism is still a withstanding issue; along with using entertainment to distract ourselves of the issues of our reality.

Gambino doesn’t state what is right nor what is wrong. He argues that police brutality and racism is still a withstanding issue; along with using entertainment to distract ourselves of the issues of our reality.

Commonly confused words: Words that have similar sounds, but different meaning

The jolly dancing students, the peculiar comical than serious facial expressions, contrast with the chaotic scene in the background.

The jolly dancing students, the peculiar comical then serious facial expressions, contrast with the chaotic scene in the background.

Comma splice: A variety of run on sentences that occur when two complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb are joined mistakenly with a comma

In the back, you can see many people being chased, starting to riot, its chaotic.

  In the back, you can see many people being chased, starting to riot. Its chaotic.

Missing comma: Not always grammatically necessary, commas help prevent a is reading.

He includes lots of emotionally loaded language, vivid descriptions and visuals; he also uses multiple examples of the real life tragedies the black community has to endure.

He includes lots of emotionally loaded language, vivid descriptions, and visuals; he also uses multiple examples of the real life tragedies the black community has to endure.

Missing comma: Not always grammatically necessary, commas help prevent a is reading.

Each time Gambino shoots and kills someone, the gun is always taken away and placed into a red cloth; while the bodies are carelessly dragged away.

Each time Gambino shoots and kills someone, the gun is always taken away and placed into a red cloth, while the bodies are carelessly dragged away.

Animal cruelty

            All around the world different animals, domesticated and wild animals, experiences abuse and neglect. Animal cruelty takes on many different forms such as: animal hoarding, animal testing, industrial animal agriculture farms , active abuse of any kind like, intentional physically harming them and forcing cockfighting, and dog fighting. In every part of the world there are animals who are being neglected, starved, beaten, and not well taken care. There are people who look the other way when they encounter an animal who is being neglected in anyway.  Animal abuse of any sort should never be taken lightly or ignore, as the animals too feel fear, pain, desperation and sorrow.

              Animal cruelty is such a huge issue, that isn’t talked about enough. Whether it be because people aren’t aware of the different forms of abuse or because they may think that they are just one person, what difference would it make? Imagine how many other people think that exact thing. Calling and reporting any signs of neglect and abuse you see, is a small step towards helping those animals in need. Being aware of the different forms of abuse  Despite you being, just one person, you speaking on behalf of the helpless, voiceless animals may make a big impact on not just the animals, but it can encourage others who aren’t aware , to inform themselves and possibly help make a change.

            Animal cruelty has been an ongoing issue for a very long. Some action has been taken to express the severity of this issue. For example, recently the senates passed a law that makes animal cruelty and abuse a federal felony. I think this is a good step towards showing those who aren’t aware of just how severe the consequence to animal abuse is.

            There are many people who don’t believe animal cruelty is as big as an issue as it really is. Some people may not think that animals too have rights. Domesticated pets have the right to be in a safe, loving home where they receive all their needs and love. Wild animals have the right too live freely amongst their environment. Often there are people who feel entitled to use and treat animals in any way they see fit, usually profit gain and simply for entertainment.

             Industrial farmers keep the animals in absolutely terrible conditions. They are placed into cages that are far too small for some of their bodies, or multiple animals are kept together with little to no room to move around, then they get slaughter for the either their meats, eggs and dairy. Perhaps there isn’t any way to around the slaughtering of the animals, reducing your consumption of meat can decrease the amount of the animals from being slaughtered. Exposing the horrible suffering that the animals in those farms have to endure their entire life can bring awareness to their suffering. With the knowledge of the cruelty the industrial farms bring to the animals , can hopefully persuade people to maybe decrease their consumptions of the products these animals produce.

Animals who have been in an abusive environment and are taken away due to neglect, are placed in shelters to get another chance at a happy, safe life. Neglect is not properly  taking care of the animal, only giving them very little basic needs; while active abuse is physically mistreating and hurting them, keeping them in an unsafe, and/or unsanitary environment. Although those animals that are placed in the shelters, they may receive only simple basic care and needs. It is very common for people to believe that all shelters are kind and caring to the animals but sadly that isn’t always that case for animal shelters.

When I talked to my classmates’ , I learned that many of them are apart of the sympathetic audience. They agreed with my solution, and they even provided me with some tips on how to make my solution bit more effective. I didn’t speak to anyone apart of the hostile audience, nor a neutral audience. They also helped me with adding helpful tips for my solution, they said to have those who take in animals educate themselves on how to properly take care of the animals. Also, to encourage others to be aware of the severity of this issue, and how they can help by reporting suspicion of abuse.

I.Introduction-Give an explanation on animal abuse and neglect and explain why its crucial something must be done about it. Include thesis statement at the end and explain what it is I am arguing.

II. Body Paragraph– General background information-explain in more depth, the abuse and neglect animals suffer, and include reasons, claims and evidence to support those claims and any other statement included.

III. Address the opposite side –

IV. Conclusion-Explain the importance of this issue and why a solution is needed or the situation will continue to increase.